Happiness

Sat, 10/26/2013 - 11:37 -- Nimbalo

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Memories come always,

Clouding my thoughts.

I remember all the times we had.

We never thought once of the future, 

And that is where we're wrong.

Now I have what I always wanted,

So I need not look back.

I'll remember you, but meanwhile

I'm moving on.

Comments

WordSmith_15

Good poem. I like it. It's short and concise and shows me that less can surely be more. I also like how you employ the use of time. Not sure if you were going for a theme on time and continuity but I felt one. Btw, thanks for the response on my poem. 

Keep writing =) 

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