One Night

Mon, 07/07/2014 - 11:53 -- lild
infatuated with her body
she was infatuated with him...
he mind raped her
raped of her innocence
with no hesitance 
she wept 
seduced by his words
left with misleading thoughts of what had concurred
between them
he raped her soul 
left her cold
in this cruel cold world
too his boys he's the man
and too him she was just another
one night stand.
 
 
 

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lild

Give me some FEEDBACK !
 

BennyB

I like what you did with making it all lowercase, it really makes a parallel with the delicacy you use to tackle this. But is your use of "too" in your third to last and second to last lines a typo since grammatically it seems it should be "to"? Or is that purposeful? I couldn't tell

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