Unstrung

My mind is so clouded,
My thoughts so corrupt. 
My chest feels so tightened, 
My breathing isn't enough. 

Heavens knows I'm trying 
To not be so fucked up, 
But these voices, they're crying,
They won't let me interrupt

The air in my lungs 
Seems barely enough to get me by. 
My thoughts are so unstrung, 
I can't get them straight even if I tried.

Comments

k.safoura

That's a lot of sufferment in one poem. I like the flow of this

aaashleylopez

Yeah, it definitely is loaded. I remember writing it feeling 10x more overwhelmed. Thank you. It really means a lot to me that you've commented on my poems. 

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