3-Part Thursday
The Choice
Prescience an Angel
that rides on the storm
To bring us good tidings
or danger to warn
Spreading its wings
that determine our fate
The choice to jump on
— better early than late
(Dreamsleep: February, 2026)
Time Unwound
Looking ahead
today is ignored
Tomorrow unpromised
this moment secure
All joy in returning
where riches surround
To presence surrendered
— where time is unwound
(The New Room: February, 2026)
Now & Forever
I married
character
You married
cheese
I vowed
for life
Your words
to tease
I married
beauty
You married
lust
I am
still married
Yours
— is a bust
(Dreamsleep: February, 2026)
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Mix of personal reflection (marriage, choices) with philosophical abstraction (fate, time, presence).
Multiple dense ideas across three poems: fate/choice, temporal philosophy, relationship critique. Compact delivery.
Mixed tones: hopeful angelic imagery, meditative presence, but sharp satirical critique of failed marriage.
Moderate intensity. Storm/wings create movement, but meditative passages and dry humor dampen explosive force.
Three discrete poems totaling approximately 28 lines across the submission.
Angel riding storm, wings determining fate, time unwound, marriage as metaphor. Sustained but not maximally ornate.
Primarily lyric internal voice with occasional dramatic address ('You married cheese'). Mostly introspective.
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