🌈_________________________ 🙏 (Weekly prompt)
Praise The Messiah for another day above ground and allow you and I to see blue 🔵 skies with no clouds in sight
I can smell the coffee in the air, plus the babies laughing, dancing with Nana in the kitchen singing 🟣 Purple Rain (Prince), grandma yells
" son that ain't right "
She kept going before I can even try to spit a line, she replied with a smile" boy you better get it right, the Pioneer is loud and clear, can't you hear it's Barry White 🤍???
get off the green 🍏, please cause you ain't hearing right 😂 "
I smiled, winked, blew a kiss, waved goodbye, went outside, praised Christ, then on my way to Circle k to buy some Frito Lays, diet coke, E&J, 🍊 orange Optimo for the dro and a pack of Marlboro lights
I was thinking tho, like damn, Granny probably right about the weed, plus I drink and it can lead to them 🟡 yellow Xannys or maybe even china white, Lord forgive me, I have a family, I ain't thinking right 😢
But hey it's Friday night, rent on time, kids left with there mammy and there other daddy aka happy family, I'm fine and dandy, that's on my life, kids are happy, I have my Daddy Jesus Christ, plus my granny, and them Xannys, one more night of getting hi, one last time I roll the dice, play with life, live or die, it's either paradise or eternal 🔥.... 🖤 And 🤍
Forgive me Abba
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“Weekly Challenge: Write a sonnet about what keeps you going when everything is hard. Constraint: Include a color in every stanza.”
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▾ This Poem's Voice
Your Poem's Voice
PersonalThemeAbstract
Deeply personal/autobiographical about speaker's daily life, family, struggles
SparseMeasureDense
Multiple dense ideas: family, faith, substance use, mortality crammed throughout
DarkSentimentBright
Mixed: joy/love for family balanced against regret, addiction, moral uncertainty
StillEnergyExplosive
Rapid-fire pacing, exclamations, dialogue, movement, emphatic tone throughout
MicroLengthEpic
Approximately 26 lines; falls in 16-30 range
PlainFigurativeOrnamented
Moderate use of metaphor (paradise/eternal fire), personification, some ornamentation
LyricVoiceDramatic
Primarily lyric internal reflection with embedded dramatic dialogue sections
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