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AFTER PASSING A KIDNEY STONE


 

The spear-billed and

red breasted hummingbird

dips his head in to the

dew kissed tulips.

 

Spreading his emerald

wings, he measures his

own span like a carpenter

counting degrees of width

to a new door.

 

Flitting from the yellow

petal's stool and darting toward

evergreen trees, the hummingbird

tweets a faint secret.

 

Taking root in to the ear

of a traipsing vagabond,

the hummingbird's whisper

lulls him to sleep.

 

Twisted with pain as

if a dagger had burrowed

its way in to his spine,

the wanderer falls.

 

Folding his body in

to the dip of earth where

gnarled tree roots form Entish toes,

he lays.

 

A small prickly stone nests in

the flat open palm of the

soiled man's left hand

like a Robin's egg.

 

His eyes seal together, and

his nostrils shrink to a pucker

while the still small voice

of the hummingbird's lullaby

 

softens him with feathery down,

cradles him like a nursing babe,

and swaths him like spring scented bed sheets,

with sweet and welcomed rest.

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Comments (4)

lizardoa21
<p>Thats great it is a good piece and once you realize what your missing and continue working on it would love to read it again.&nbsp;</p>
PostcardPoet
<p>Thank you for your constructive criticism. &nbsp;You&#39;re right about there seeming to be something missing. I&#39;ve struggled with that for quite some time. &nbsp;By far, this is one of my favorite academic style pieces I&#39;ve written, and I want to revise it. &nbsp;I&#39;ll patiently wait for the muses to inspire me on how to bridge the gap. &nbsp;</p>
lizardoa21
<p>beautiful imagery i love the idea of the hummingbird its such a beautiful thing. Was very vivid but the organization kind of confused me a little bit since it apears to be telling a story. Yet feels like a piece is missing or stanze or something because i went from the beautiful image of a humingbird with flowers and all who then lands by this mans ear to the man coiling in pain yet feels like there was no warning and hint as to why other then the title.&nbsp;</p>
I Am That Girl
<p>I live your imagery, nice write poet</p>

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