Awesome Isn’t Everything

What does awesome mean to you?

When you think of awesome

You think of that great big success

You think of acing that end-of-year test

We think of celebrations and parties

And being our best

Yet around the world people don't get food everyday

Much less celebrations

Or music to play

Kids worry about where they are going to sleep

They don't have any possessions to hold or to keep

Hungry babies just two or three

Kids just as old as you and me

They run the family

And scavenge for food

But these are things you and I don't have to do

We eat three meals a day

And come home to our beds

We don't have to worry about a roof over our heads

That is why awesome to me isn't some beautiful sight

It's not some thrill ride that gives me a fright

Awesome is just the way I live every day

It’s the things I do

The words I say

The choices I get

And the breaths I breathe

These are important to me

This is the awesome that so many don't know

They have too many struggles to pull and tow

They don't have anything awesome to show

I could tell the story of some crazy dream

Or the time I found that one special thing

But instead I will tell you something that is true

What’s awesome are the basic things I can do

I'm glad that I can sleep in a bed

Much less paint my nails or dye my hair red

I’m overjoyed that I have a place to live

Much less having gifts to get or to give

I'm delighted to go to school every day

Forget about chores or having bills to pay

I’m ecstatic I have a family that cares

Forget having things that I need to share

Yes there are things I love and hate

But I don't have to worry about when I last ate

Maybe you work long hours or your homework stinks

But are you so hungry you can't even think?

Have you ever been so thirsty you couldn’t move?

Have you ever been without a single pair of shoes?

For us, everything is awesome

But awesome isn’t everything

Some people have too much

Some have nothing

And yet we don’t try and change this

We say it’s just aimless

So what will you do?

Let me ask you again

What does awesome mean to you?

This poem is about: 
Me
My family
My community
My country
Our world

Comments

bcsuza

Inspiring.

AllieBillman

Thank you.

saudade

incredible and inspiring. I love the way you ended it

 

aniketnikhade

The title of the poem is perfect, but it can be different. This is because the end of the poem is absolutely perfect. The end of the poem takes it above the common way of mentioning things and it is because of the end that the poem reaches it peak. A very well written, brilliant way of expressing things, interesting and absorbing poem.

 

A few things about the poem which I think need attention are as follows:

1.

We think of celebrations and parties

And being our best

The above two lines, if they are continued as the lines prior then I think the poem will be more interesting. Thus the above two lines can be as follows or something like this:

 

You think of celebrations and parties

And also being at your best

 

This is then followed by the following:

2.

This is the awesome that so many don't know

They have too many struggles to pull and tow

They don't have anything awesome to show

The above lines need to be looked into close details. This is because the first line is perfectly in place, which needs some changes, however, the next two lines need to be edited. There is no need for these two lines. This is because already so much is mentioned, again bringing back the things from start makes things dull. So the first line can be something like this:

This is what awesome means

Something which many don't know

 

This is then followed by the following:

3.

What’s awesome are the basic things I can do

 

The above line needs a change. Change only because it seems to be somewhat difficult to go through while reading. The above line can be as follows:

 

What awesome things I do

Or

What are the awesome thing I deal with

 

The poem is very well written. It has a perfect ending. Based upon what I liked about the poem, I have made the above suggestions. These are not corrections. Mentioned above is my interpretation of the poem and some suggestions that I feel will make the poem further interesting. The title of the poem can be something like, "What awesome mean to you?"

 

 

AllieBillman

Thank you, I appreciate your suggestions.

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