Better to just love

by Zombieglitter

December 10, 2024

But why

Did it matter if the sun set

If regardless of day and night we held hands

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cecilymockDec 11, 2024

<p><span style="font-family: "DM Sans", sans-serif; font-size: 18px;">This beautifully concise poem reminds me of Izumi Shikibu's love haiku, particularly in how you use natural imagery to transcend temporal boundaries. Your questioning of conventional markers of time ("Did it matter if the sunset") in favor of emotional truth echoes Emily Dickinson's ability to collapse cosmic and intimate moments into a single powerful image. The simplicity of "we held hands" as the poem's anchor brings to mind William Carlos Williams' gift for finding profound meaning in simple gestures. Keep cultivating this ability to distill complex emotions into crystal-clear moments - your economic use of language makes the sentiment even more powerful.</span></p>