PoemsBrowse PoemsSlamsFresh DropEchoes
LearnWriting TipsPoetry TermsPoets & ArtistsBooksFor Teachers
ExplorePoetry GenomePoem MapEchoesTake ActionGroups
AboutWrite a PoemDonateSign UpLog In

Brain Freeze


The sound of striking pain across the cheek So discreet The foot steps I tremble cold feet I called it defeat If I was strong enough i could've helped The screams made my brain freeze.Why didn't I melt? They think there the champ heavy weight belt When she was as soft as a feather weight. I wonder how she felt? My brain freezes with fear I peeked through the door It's like I ate something cold, but it was the cold deceit of the delusive eye The cold stare of the crying eye The dark strong spot that surrounded the eye I cry, I cry, I cry But the words from the wounded What happens in the house stays in the house The fear behind love watching life go by All that left me with was a frozen brain wondering. Why?
©All Rights Reserved

Something wrong with this poem?

Share

Replies are closed for this poem.

wilkerson.rodney

View all poems →

Your Poem's Voice

See what makes your poem unique — its voice, energy, themes, and the literary traditions it draws from.

Comments (4)

Hailey.Aaron
You're certainly welcome!
wilkerson.rodney
Thanks for the tips :)
Hailey.Aaron
Hi there! your poem needs to give a little more detail on what seems to be going on. To me it just seems so blunt. I really liked it though, good job! (: (for instance, go more into detail on how you are reacting to the situation, is your blood pumping? are you sweating? etc.)
wilkerson.rodney
Life is full of ups and downs this was just one that I faced i hope it touches someone!

Log in to leave a comment.