Burnt Green Onions
Are you qualified
to comment
Are you predisposed
to care
Can your envy
make it better
When you rip
and then you tear
Sleeping
with the devil
The critic
stirs his pot
Trying to recook
the stew
With all the things
— he’s not
(Dreamsleep: November, 2025)
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Critique and artistic jealousy explored philosophically yet grounded in personal artistic struggle.
Dense clustering of ideas: qualification, envy, destruction, criticism, inadequacy packed tightly.
Bitter, accusatory tone regarding critics and their destructive nature; deeply negative.
Sharp rhetorical questions, tearing/ripping imagery, active 'stirring' create kinetic intensity.
Nine lines; micro to very short poem length.
Sleeping with devil, stirring pot, recooking stew; rich metaphors for criticism and jealousy.
Primarily lyric internal voice addressing 'you' (critic), shifting toward dramatic accusation.
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