Change Upside Your Face

November 18, 2012

Emotion center Orbital cortex Voices whisper Signals obey Actions obscure Hatred remains Weeds grown Flowers choked Timing waits Perfection almost Overtaken beauty Twisted lines Crossed lines Broken bounds Release

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QVOct 7, 2013

A bit fragmented. Who is speaking or being addressed in your piece? This can be a serious problem if the words seem to float in the air without a point of view. Complicated does not make a poem good, only takes away from the readers. Continue to write and experiment in your poems though, this can be a way to discover your voice. Q.V.

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