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clouded


fog clouds the morning air, smoke clouds the eyes, and cold steel clouds my judgment. is there a time when fog lifts, is there a time when smoke fades, is there a time when the thoughts disappear. unlike fog and smoke steel is solid, always infront of me, unable to be forgotten. How did this happen to me, how did a blade take over my life, how could steel cloud my judgment. with my path clouded by fog, my eyes filled with smoke, and the blade in hand, i stand quietly. i may not be able to see the ground infro of me, or the air past the smoke, but i can see my future, and the blade wont last. i may not be able to control the fog, or the smoke filled air, but i can control my own head. I seperate myself from the steel, and wait for another challenge to arise, because my head is no longer clouded.
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jamieeriebe13

i am 17 years old i live in wisconsin and i have had many things happen in the short time that i have been on this earth. By joining this community i hope that by sharing my story through my poems that i can help prevent teens from going through what i did.

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jwiener
Writing stories is part of writing poetry, and you write a clear story with this poem, since it has a beginning, middle, and end. The tone shifts from being dark and distracted to being confident and seeing clearly which really adds to the personality of the poem. You are a great writer!

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