Consequences of rushing

by Jodanny_14

April 6, 2022

Before going out, she eats curry.

Outside she goes down the road.

She sees the time, she needs to hurry.

Then she ends up running over a toad.

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Comments (2)

Lexi S.Apr 6, 2022

This poem is fun to read. The emotion I mainly get from reading this is stress. This person is stressed out and scrambling around, she is racing mindlessly to try and catch up on time only to run over a toad. My favorite line would have to be, "Then she ends up running over a toad." It adds a side of comedy to this poem, but it doesn't get away from the theme. The structure is good, and everything stays on topic and is clear to read.

931535Apr 6, 2022

Stage: A person in a rush. Tone: FranticLanguage & Lit. Devices: Ryhmes are great! Energy is really there it's very fastpaced.Structure & Layout: The Final line feels a bit abrupt so maybe try a line between it to flow better? Great Poem!<div> </div>