On the edge Optimism

April 4, 2013

In life we wish to feel many emotions we can't fulfill. In hard times we hurt and convert that pain into stress, depression, and sometimes affection. 100% of the time we should live, laugh, love 50% of the time we would die, cry, and hate When we should have Faith 8 times with milliones if fines 7 crimes we wish we wouldn't have commited 6 chimes we want to hear in result of our success 5 mangoes we wish to enjoy but criticize 4 doors we strive to open 3 trees we pray to cultivate 2 second chances we aspire to have just in case 1 life to live 0 excuses Behind any unpleasant weather I shall always see the beautiful horizon "El inicuo ya no sera"

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Comments (3)

SilkiaCJun 25, 2013

<p>Thank you very much!</p>

RebeccaYSPerezJun 25, 2013

<p>I absolutely love this poem, and it is definitely going to go down as one of my favorites. I like that you kept everything light and happy, and though you mentioned somethings that aren't quite so, you were able to keep them as such. The moral is clear and I love how the picture depicts "rose coloured glasses" which are often paired with optimism. Thank you for this beautiful poem.</p>

SilkiaCApr 4, 2013

All combined into one, try to see the positive side over all odds.