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EXIT


What is an angel if he is not obedient

What is a god if he is not all-knowing

What is a human if he is not…

 

Not what?

 

Finish the sentence. 

 

Why aren’t you writing?

 

The house on the hill is made of cardboard

Your hands are translucent, the pen is snapped in half

The sky is nothing but bricks, painted blue and white

The Sun is just a projection.

Is it real?

 

They are watching.

 

Bloodshot eyes with wings, mushrooms loom at heights too tall

Walking through endless pastures

The glow of the EXIT sign

It brings hope, the promise of escape

Open the door.

Pale floors and walls stare back at you

Defying you.

The absence of life, once chased after,

Leaves numbness.

The humming of a generator

You cannot find it, the lights buzz in your ears 

Comfort should reside here, 

 

You will regret this.

 

Corners devoid of safety, inviting you to step closer

Figures evading your sight

It must only be the others.

The ones before you, who were so unfortunate to stumble here.

 

…what is a human if he is not controlled?

You continue to write in silence in that fragile abode.

Were they taken?

Their voices?

 

You tap your 14 year old self on the shoulder 

Watching what was so broken continue to float

She's got an Xbox controller and a boat full of dreams

Water trickled from the same faucet, an everlasting pool

You watch the tub fill up

Just to drop the cord in.

It's too bad the tiles are only reflecting this.

 

Glowing red words that were nothing but lies

Promises, guilt, acceptance...

 

Keep writing!

You don't have a choice.

I'm right here in your chest

Can you feel my talons clasp your ribcage?

Your lungs are too waterlogged to resist.

Perception of yourself is disgusting 

Eventually, it'll be staggering through that empty mall, the tiled floors, rolling hills made of turf. 

Pastels too muted to feel kind,

Is it real? 

No time has passed, yet you've aged

 

What is a writer if she is not a martyr?

 

There will be a time when you leave a place you spent so long in, 

The EXIT sign is all you will remember.

 
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PersonalThemeAbstract

Blends personal trauma with existential questions about identity and control.

SparseMeasureDense

Rapid-fire surreal imagery and philosophical questions densely packed throughout.

DarkSentimentBright

Overwhelmingly dark, hopeless, suffocating; despair dominates despite EXIT sign imagery.

StillEnergyExplosive

Urgent, fragmented syntax; repeated imperatives and fragmented questions propel visceral intensity.

MicroLengthEpic

Approximately 45-50 lines; solidly in the 31-60 range.

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Abundant metaphor, personification, surreal imagery; cardboard houses, translucent hands, projected suns.

LyricVoiceDramatic

Primarily lyric internal voice with dramatic shifts; addresses reader/self; persona emerging.

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