forgive me...........

by MVP-Most Valuable Poet

July 31, 2013

forgive me if i laugh

you are so sure of love

you are so young

and i'm too grown in learning about love.

the rain exploding

in the air is love

the grass excreting me

sky is the tranquility of peace

and stones remembering

past steps is love,

but you. you are too young

for love

and i'm too grown

once. what does it matter

when or who, i knew

of love.

i fixed my body

under mine and went

to sleep in love

all trace of me

was wiped away

forgive me if i smile

young heiress of a naked dream

you are so young

and im too grown to learn of love.

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MVP-Most Valuable PoetJan 29, 2014

i get inspiration from all overi give much respect and lovethank u 4 support-check out my other poems

Dragon QueenJan 29, 2014

Wow, this is incredibly similar to Sonia Sanchez's Ballad, one of my favorites.

MVP-Most Valuable PoetJul 31, 2013

thank you for the commentmy inspiration come from infinite-something i feel, saw, read, witness, watch, etcit brings out ideasregarding the format-for some odd reason, format itself came out different when i posted itim very humble that you enjoy my poems-check out my other pieces

QVJul 31, 2013

I wonder where you get your inspiration from, there seems to be new poems every time I visit your page! The older mature lover and younger idealized lover is a theme that is usually written from the infatuated view, rarely the recepient (I guess you had to make yourself clear). I do suggest that you format the poem, it can be difficult to read and I find myself stopping during a line of poetry to reallly understand your point. Charming piece. Q.V.