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Fragements of an Ocean


Fragements of an Ocean

Was it in vain

when I smeared Fragments of the Ocean around my dirt poor eyes

Just for you to turn around and gaze nothing but an oil spill? 

I polluted myself for you

The ocean itself bellowed

 and roared 

and Shrieked

Hell opened up

the ocean volatilized

and the sea salt they gathered?

was sprinkled on chocolates in a heart shaped box

For Her

 
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PersonalThemeAbstract

Personal sacrifice and rejection; grounded in specific emotional experience

SparseMeasureDense

Multiple compressed ideas: self-pollution, environmental destruction, betrayal, dark transformation

DarkSentimentBright

Deeply negative; anguish, betrayal, desecration, hellish imagery throughout

StillEnergyExplosive

Turbulent verbs: bellowed, roared, shrieked, volatilized; intense emotional discharge

MicroLengthEpic

Approximately 13 lines; falls in 7-15 range

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Rich metaphors: ocean as self, pollution as devotion, oil spill, sea salt on chocolate

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure lyric internal monologue; direct emotional confession from first-person voice

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