A Glimpse of You

by Onelove_JC

July 16, 2013

My soul is downcast from fighting in the flesh.

So far and distant, a glimpse of You is what I need.

As the deer pants for streams of water, so my soul pants for You.

I am lost in a dry land without direction, with no destination,

No one to come to my rescue.

I desperately thirst for the living water,

Pure like the river in heaven that floods from the throne of God bringing life.

We've meet before,

You used to visit me in my dreams,

but how long ‘till you speak to me again?

Day and night, I longed to see Your face,

I cry out loud for Your embrace.

Forever until we meet again I will yearn for a delight encounter with the Almighty.

So, when can I go and meet with You again?

My soul thirsts for a glimpse of the living God.

(Psalm 42)

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Mafi GreyOct 20, 2014

This was really good, keep doing you.

QVMar 16, 2014

I saw your request, and I will do my best with my observations. The images of the flesh is very Paulinian and the imagery of a wasteland (you can use the word desert if you want) does emphasize the distance. Again, I encourage you to read Song of Songs so that the image of the groom (Chirst) and the bride (His Church or believer) can offer you inspirations with continuing this piece or a new piece. If you are describing the absence sometimes felt by the beloved, may I recommend the poem "Dark Night of the Soul" (a classic on the divine union). Keep on writing. Q.V.

MVP-Most Valuable PoetAug 5, 2013

i agree that the psalm was an inspirationgreat reflection on your encounterscontinue to build and expand your horizon

Onelove_JCAug 5, 2013

Hey, thanks for the feedback ;) this poem was just a draft as I faced difficult times but yes, this poem was inspired by Psalms songs, describing the love of God and absence of His presence through tribulations. By a “glimpse” I’m referring to an encounter with God.  I made some changes to it. Mind reading it again? I would love to hear back from you again.

QVAug 5, 2013

The psalms are a great place for inspiration, as a matter of fact,  I wondered if your poem was mystic (describing the love of a person for God, such as Gerard Manley Hopkins) or simply a love poem. I will assume it is a "mystic poem" from your other poems (but I do make mistakes). The only thing I wanted to say about your charming poem is be careful of the line break between lines 12 and 13 (are you trying to say a glimpse is "once again" what you "long for" or is it something else since the lines are disconnected?). It could be the picture that is causing this problem, but the imagery of a deer longing for water is a good (traditional) metaphor for longing and desire to be joined to the beloved (I wonder if you have tried Canticle of Canticles). Q.V.