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Proverbs 26:11 – “As a dog returns to its vomit, so fools repeat their folly.” 16 y/o. I write shitty words about my shitty life (and sometimes my ocs). My BPD and OCD influences a majority of said writings.
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Deeply personal bodily horror, grounded in first-person experience rather than universal philosophy.
Multiple dense, visceral ideas compressed into relatively brief space; high conceptual density.
Strongly negative; decay, self-harm, alienation, bodily dissolution dominate throughout.
Explosive, kinetic language: squelch, rip, burst, aggressive tactile verbs create violent intensity.
Approximately 14 lines; falls in 7-15 range.
Rich metaphor (kneading flesh like dough), personification (hand alienated), vivid sensory imagery throughout.
Pure lyric internal voice; introspective first-person consciousness examining own body.
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