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Hypocrite


I give a lot of advice And people say it’s good But I wish I could say that too. Can I rescue you If I’m drowning too? God I want to become you There are times when I break I can’t help but keep asking you. Why must you ask the blind To lead more blind I can’t find you. But I can’t find the words The words to admit. Ħįpøçřıťė Can’t even talk to you opposite I know i won’t get to you I know you can’t listen too I wish I had a friend like me Honestly I’m through I’m done explaining Well actually I’ll say Just a bunch of pressure The right amount to turn you into a fossil maybe Until you are a shell of yourself Dead kind of dead eye that you earn over time. And I still can’t find words to admit I’m but a Hypocrite And all I’ve ever wanted was to save you Our struggles aren’t equal That’s not true That’s because your are yet to break you I’d give more advice to you It might be good But I can’t say that too I’m very sorry to admit You’ve met a hypocrite I myself am blind I can’t save you And if I could I’d do it all Again.
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PersonalThemeAbstract

Personal struggle with hypocrisy; mostly autobiographical with some universal questioning

SparseMeasureDense

Multiple dense ideas: advice-giving, drowning, blindness, hypocrisy, fossil metaphor compressed

DarkSentimentBright

Strongly negative: despair, failure, inability to help, self-condemnation throughout

StillEnergyExplosive

Urgent questioning and fragmented syntax create tension; intensity builds but tempered by exhaustion

MicroLengthEpic

Approximately 50 lines; substantial length in upper-middle range

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Metaphors: drowning, blind leading blind, fossil, shell; repetition; distorted text; strong ornamentation

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure lyric internal monologue; direct address to 'you' but speaker's internal crisis dominates

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