Innocence

<p><span style="font-size:14px;"><span style="font-family:arial,helvetica,sans-serif;">Thank you again for your suggestions! :) &quot;<font color="#252525"><span style="line-height: 21px;">Let the material itself tell you what the poem wants to be.&quot; That quote of yours has quite literally just become one of my new philosophies!&nbsp;<img alt="smiley" height="20" src="http://www.powerpoetry.org/sites/all/libraries/ckeditor/plugins/smiley/images/regular_smile.gif" title="smiley" width="20" /></span></font></span></span></p>

<p>Nice haiku! Elegantly told. It feels almost like an epigram, or a maxim.&nbsp;I think my favorite part here is the half rhyme between &quot;mine&quot; and &quot;mind&quot;. I like the definiteness, or tone of finality, here in &quot;It can / Change minds, but not mine&quot;.&nbsp;Things to think about for the future: usually, if you use a word as a title, you don&#39;t have to reuse it in the poem itself.&nbsp;That would free you up to use other words to &quot;evoke&quot; or express innocence without actually using that specific word.&nbsp;I think what you could do is keep this poem as it is, and then write another haiku that uses more images&nbsp;to convey / express what it is that you&#39;re aiming to express. A good link to have a look at is this one:&nbsp;( http://www.haikuworld.org/begin/mdwelch.tentips.html ) If what you write wants to be longer than a haiku, then go with that. Let the material itself tell you want the poem wants to be.&nbsp;Finally, Haiku can be challenging, to get eveything you want to say into one space is hard, so congrats on this one!</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>&nbsp;</p>