insanity

August 28, 2013

a wise man once said that the true definition of insanity was doing the same things over and over again and expecting different results. Why is it that so many of us live our lives and commit the same faults? Constantly dropping into pitfalls instead of just looking down & jumping across. I believe that fallings just a key part of getting up,sometimes you have to f#(k up before you can get up and flaunt. A baby bird has to learn to fly before it can hunt. Sometimes I feel stuck, trapped in my childish ways for days and days and days...& days. To worried about everyone else instead I need to do my own thing. Everyday I be doing the same thing and everyday expecting things to change, now if I can tell you anything id tell you that that's insane.

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swag_nificantSep 5, 2013

I really appreciate the feed back. Thank you

QVSep 1, 2013

<p>I think your work is compelling and it causes the audience, no matter what age to try to remember a time when they were "trapped in [their] childish way for days". The emotions are genuine :) I am curious, how long have you been writing? When comparing your more recent pieces to this one, there are difference. This is a journal style common to many teen writers, the emotion is raw and the desire for expression is present, but you are "forcing" your audience to listen without really giving them space to think (you told them everything). In poetry, it is tempting to vent or place all our thoughts onto paper as originality, but over the years I have learned that little of what we write is original (this is the challenge, turning human emotions that everyone shares into originality). Try to avoid cliches and overused phrases (for example: "baby bird... can hunt" or "I feel stuck"). In poetry, there is a need to transform even the simplest phrase into a meditation. Keep on writing and reading poetry, but also reflect on your own work as the months and years progress. I wish you the best in your writing. Q.V.</p>

swag_nificantAug 28, 2013

<p>Some feed back would be very helpful and appreciated</p>