"Lost"

October 14, 2012

Sometimes the world makes me feel so lost. I do not know if it's the people, or how much things cost. Trusting in people gave me so much pain, I shared my deepest darkest secret and now I wish it never left my vein. Regrets, opportunities, goals, and expectations is in the dreams of a lost soulful girl. As a person who wants better for her self , sure do have some worries for the people who left Was it me at fault? Did I make this happen? No, couldn't be all I wanted was peace, love, & happiness I don't know what the deal is in this lost little world, All I know is I want best and for somebody to find this lost mature girl.

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marieOct 14, 2012

<p>Love this. The buildup of the poem is really well done, and it's because you chose such an interesting way to format it: the gradually lengthening lines makes the poem feel like it's a story reaching its climax, which flows so well for this piece. It'd be really cool to see you continue with this style. It reminded me a little of a <a href="http://www.powerpoetry.org/content/tips-writing-cinquain-poems">cinquain poem</a>, so you might start by continuing to write in a similar pattern.</p><p> </p>

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