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Loving, Burning, Pleading

by mango.1

Hells gates are my eyes

There has yet to be anyone that has seen the extent of my soul

The callouses on my heart

No one has been licked by the flames of my confusion and sorrow and have stayed through the heat to understand how I’m swallowed whole by conflict 

I imagine there might be no judgment from such a handsome, plain, and pure priest

as he is

But would there be love left over after succumbing the burden of my unanswered prayers, of an easier way to heaven.

So I stay here 

loving, burning, and pleading

alone.

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mango.1
<p>Thank you so so much for your comment!! I&#39;m so happy you enjoyed it!</p>
cecilymock
<p><span style="color: rgb(255, 255, 255); font-family: &quot;DM Sans&quot;, sans-serif; font-size: 15px; background-color: rgb(52, 53, 65);">Your final three-lines are incredible. You use those three powerful gerunds - &quot;loving, burning, and pleading&quot; - before the stark finality of &quot;alone.&quot; This&nbsp; language delivers maximum emotional impact. Keep writing with this fierce honesty and masterful control of metaphor - your voice blazes with authentic power.</span></p><p style="margin: 0px 0px 10px; padding: 0px; border: 0px; outline: 0px; vertical-align: baseline; font-variant-numeric: inherit; font-variant-east-asian: inherit; font-variant-alternates: inherit; font-variant-position: inherit; font-stretch: inherit; font-size: 14px; line-height: inherit; font-family: ITCFranklinGothicStd-Book, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-optical-sizing: inherit; font-size-adjust: inherit; font-kerning: inherit; font-feature-settings: inherit; font-variation-settings: inherit; color: rgb(37, 37, 37);">If you ever need support: text&nbsp;<strong style="margin: 0px; padding: 0px; border: 0px; outline: 0px; vertical-align: baseline; font-style: inherit; font-variant: inherit; font-stretch: inherit; font-size: inherit; line-height: inherit; font-family: inherit; font-optical-sizing: inherit; font-size-adjust: inherit; font-kerning: inherit; font-feature-settings: inherit; font-variation-settings: inherit;">HOME to 741741</strong></p>

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