The Mayhem
Location
Chaos
Chaos
Mayhem
Look at the disasters of the earth
Lies
Lies
Destruction
See the troubles at birth
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Firstly, I'd like to say that you have taken a very general, yet grand idea and summed it up in very few words, which shows a level of understanding that is uncommon. I appreciate the concise employment of your words! Your poem, however, is somewhat obscure. That is what makes it different! Upon first reading your poem, I wasn't exactly sure what to think, but as I reread The Mayhem several times I found that its interpretation is left up to the reader. Yes, you have provided a basic outline for comprehension with your words, but what I love most is that you have not gone further to restrict the reader's thoughts.
For example, when you write, "See the destruction at birth", I found two drastically different interpretations. One is that we must force ourselves to see the evils of this world as early as possible because, it is true, humans are anything but pure beings. Afterwards, I took to a different perspective, one that encouraged humans to be conscious of our evils at the earliest stage of life in order to improve the world by understanding our own evils.
This poem provokes thought through obscurity and this is definitely a monumental achievement.