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My Mother Told Me..


I can remember what my Mom said to me,

She said please dont drink, and have a sprit instead.

So I kissed and huged my mom goodbye.

Im at the party, and everyone has a drink.

I can remeber what my mom had said,

She said please dont drink, and have a sprite instead.

I should have listened to my mom, instead

Im laying here with blood all around me,

and I all I can hear are the paramedics say; 

Please call her parents, she is going to die ,

So I lay here, and say; Please tell my mom and dad

that I love them and I will miss them. 

Im sorry I didnt listen and have a sprite instead. 

So make sure my name is on a stone, and

Ill see them when its time, So please 

Tell my mom that I will miss her and I love her..

 

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PersonalThemeAbstract

Personal narrative about specific choice, though carries cautionary universal message

SparseMeasureDense

Multiple ideas densely packed: warning, party scene, accident, regret, final message

DarkSentimentBright

Extremely negative: death, regret, loss, fatal consequences throughout

StillEnergyExplosive

Escalating intensity from dialogue to party to emergency to dying moments

MicroLengthEpic

Approximately 26 lines; falls in 16-30 range

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Minimal figurative language; mostly direct, declarative statements with minimal ornamentation

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure lyric internal voice; first-person confession and emotional reflection throughout

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