My Sins
I stare in the mirror
the devil stares back
Laughing and sneering
his taunting attack
“I bought you, I own you
now run, try to hide
Your soul has been mortgaged
your spirit is mine”
I run to the yard
and come back with a brick
At the silvery glass
I throw and then kick
The pieces all splatter
and smash on the floor
As a roar can be heard
from the rafters and more
A fire has started
the attic ablaze
With bats in the air
the demon is raised
I reach in my shirt
for the cross round my neck
For my Grandmother’s promise
to preserve and protect …
And the heat that it carries
burns bright in my hand
As I point it aloft
at the horns and demand ...
“A Rosary upon you
return to your cave
My faith is restored
— my sins he forgave”
(Villanova Pennsylvania: May, 2017)
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Blends personal spiritual struggle with abstract good-vs-evil conflict.
Dense narrative with multiple vivid images and plot turns per section.
Dark conflict but resolves toward triumph and spiritual redemption.
Explosive action verbs: throw, kick, splatter, roar, blaze, demand.
Approximately 28 lines; falls in 16-30 range.
Rich metaphor, personification, vivid imagery; highly ornamented language.
Primarily lyric first-person but dramatic confrontation with persona of devil.
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