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My wasted childhood live

by muizz (Mark)

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There's a graveyard in my mind That I revisit every time The tombstone name is written in what used to be mine I'm sorry I could not be there for you That I did not celebrate your human cheers But I'm still to drench in tears Surrounded by fears You were the light on a candle And now in darkness no one hears Its difficult for me to handle That time as went by so quick And though time moved on for me I need you to make peace To heal my sick I'm miserable but I can rest your Purgatory soul For my life has many years that it's still withholes And a story is yet to be made From the chapters that has already been fade
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muizz (Mark)

Im a seventeen year old who had a passion for writing since the 4th grade I thought it was going to take me somewhere seeing that I was the only boy who couldn't play sports who was born with a soft soft voice and remains misunderstood I have spent my childhood trying to escape every comer of it yet still I have gotten nowhere I still have big dream like making children's dream come true and going to America

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PersonalThemeAbstract

Personal grief over loss, grounded in speaker's memory and regret.

SparseMeasureDense

Multiple intertwined ideas: guilt, absence, darkness, healing, time's passage.

DarkSentimentBright

Heavily negative: grief, tears, fears, darkness, misery dominate throughout.

StillEnergyExplosive

Restrained, mournful tone with occasional intensity but mostly meditative sorrow.

MicroLengthEpic

24 lines falls in 16-30 range.

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Metaphors of graveyard/tombstone, light/candle, darkness; personification of time and soul.

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure lyric internal voice; direct emotional confession without narrative or dramatic distance.

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Comments (4)

ImAPoet?
Mark this is beautiful, I can unfortunately relate and this poem conveys the idea of childhood trauma so well!
Beautiful_lie
Mark, your poems are just so touching... I hope that one day you will make all your dreams come true...
muizz (Mark)
I didn't have a childhood which is affecting me now the time where I could've become something or made something out of it is loss
Zayn Ali
The poem is beautiful, it somehow to me reflects your childhood trauma, did you have any? or is it just a poem devoid of your personal life full of melancholy?

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