The Need

May 31, 2013

How I have seen them suffering day by day yet I could do nothing I had to leave them but now i can do something like sit and pray with all they need they seem to be only condemn truth be told all they need is salvation we the people must stand up to stop sorrow we tend to have everything in this crazy corrupt nation yet there are those who have nothing to swallow there is always a way to help those in need through depression, money, life, and something to eat all you need is to learn how to truly lead this time no retreat we must stand, be discreet for love must be in us to help the needy not everyone you know must be greedy

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SileraLunaMay 31, 2013

I was thinking of other countries and I dont think its a very good poem I was trying to get a nice Shakespearean sonnet but its a bit rusty. I did get my point across in a way, I wrote partly about being there and not knowing how to help about leaving and learning how to help to teach others how to help. Its hard to write a sonnet I haven't in a while and I was stuck on the subject so it didn't allow me much room to elaborate. but I still like it ^^