Old Friend
I’ve taken countless bullets for you
Old friend
And ever since the fire died and the smoke cleared
I saw you were the one holding the gun
Old friend
I thought you and I were close
You and I
Didn’t know you were the one that wanted me to die
Old friend
I made a mistake once
You pulled the trigger twice
Three times your words killed me
Four times I paid the price
Are you happy?
Old friend
You left me here alone
My sunshine lost its gold
I hit my final toll
Old friend
White pain is poured onto my skin
To cover up what you made maroon
What’s worse than dancing with the devil?
Writing poems about you
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PersonalThemeAbstract
Personal betrayal narrative grounded in specific relationship drama.
SparseMeasureDense
Multiple layered accusations and emotional revelations densely packed throughout.
DarkSentimentBright
Deeply negative; betrayal, pain, death wishes, suffering throughout.
StillEnergyExplosive
Intense accusatory tone; violent imagery; escalating emotional crescendo.
MicroLengthEpic
Twenty-five lines; solidly within 16-30 range.
PlainFigurativeOrnamented
Rich metaphors: bullets, guns, fire, devil, maroon, gold pain.
LyricVoiceDramatic
Pure lyric internal monologue; confessional intimate voice throughout.
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