To a Passion Dying Young
Abi Mirikitani
(Disclaimer: I wrote this poem, using stylistic mirrors such as rhyme scheme, lines, stanzas, etc. and conceptual inspiration from Housman’s “To an Athlete Dying Young” in order to appreciate past literature, yet also incorporate it in an original way to portray one of my greatest fears: failure. In this poem, as opposed to the fear being conquered, the speaker chooses flight over fight, revealing the reality that not all fears can be conquered by man. Even so, all of mankind experiences them, and thus can relate, no matter one’s fear, and even learn from it to choose a route of facing fear directly, not running from it.)
Mirikitani’s “To a Passion Dying Young”
One time the spotlight hit my face;
On stage I thought I’d found my place.
Man and boy stood cheering; I
Stared at the crowd, too grieved to cry.
Today, no audience will come
To the place I once called home.
On my face, those lights went down
After wearing cap and gown.
Foolish girl, to dream away
Of glorious fame that does not stay.
In countless bouquets after shows
Stardom withers with the rose.
Lines forgotten, scripts now shut
On scenes left at eternal cut;
Silence sounds like empty cheers.
Reality rings in the ears.
Now I’ll never need to bout
With roles that choke ambition out.
From fear of failed renown I ran,
Name dead in the mind of man.
The set is struck, the showtunes fade,
Yet I relive each part I played
When the only way was up,
Drinking from a half-full cup.
Dear Passion, that once crowned my head,
You’re a passion left for dead.
An actress falls just as her curls
Once spotlights shine on other girls.
(For reference, Housman's "To an Athlete Dying Young")
The time you won your town the race
We chaired you through the market-place;
Man and boy stood cheering by,
And home we brought you shoulder-high.
Today, the road all runners come,
Shoulder-high we bring you home,
And set you at your threshold down,
Townsman of a stiller town.
Smart lad, to slip betimes away
From fields where glory does not stay,
And early though the laurel grows
It withers quicker than the rose.
Eyes the shady night has shut
Cannot see the record cut,
And silence sounds no worse than cheers
After earth has stopped the ears.
Now you will not swell the rout
Of lads that wore their honours out,
Runners whom renown outran
And the name died before the man.
So set, before its echoes fade,
The fleet foot on the sill of shade,
And hold to the low lintel up
The still-defended challenge-cup.
And round that early-laurelled head
Will flock to gaze the strengthless dead,
And find unwithered on its curls
The garland briefer than a girl’s.
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