perfect
They say laughter is the best medicine
So we keep silent
Sit straight legs together
Hide who you are
Left, right, centre
On display like the dog you are
The whispers start quiet increasing
Sentient and vile
Louder LOUDER
Better grades, better skin
Better until you break
Pick those pieces up don't be lazy
If your not better then perfect
What are you doing
Faster, Faster
The whistle blows
Again Again
Out of breathe so soon?
Weak.
Do it again, perfection
Over, over
Dirty
Cant you feel them under your skin?
The bugs.
Crawling in you veins
Corrupted, wrong
Fix it
Its covering you
The silence
Choking twisting
Can you hear them
Or is it you?
Screaming.
Who's screaming
You.
What.?
Who's that?
Is this real?
How would they stare with such pity
If this weren't real
Why? I did everything right
I did it over and over again
Its perfection
Why.
Perfection is alien
To be human is to break
To love, to suffer is human
To exist in imperfection is perfect
Rest pain isn't perfect
Trying so hard to be something you're not
Isn't perfect
Perfection is fraud
Be human
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PersonalThemeAbstract
Moves from personal struggle to abstract philosophical statement on perfection and humanity.
SparseMeasureDense
Dense ideas compressed into short lines; rapid shifts between narrative, sensory, and philosophical content.
DarkSentimentBright
Predominantly negative—anxiety, shame, self-doubt—shifts toward acceptance but remains heavy.
StillEnergyExplosive
Explosive syntax: repetition, fragmentation, caps, staccato lines create intense kinetic momentum.
MicroLengthEpic
51 lines; falls in 31-60 range.
PlainFigurativeOrnamented
Rich metaphor (bugs in veins, display like dog), personification, sensory imagery throughout.
LyricVoiceDramatic
Primarily lyric internal monologue but includes external voices/pressure; minimal dramatic shift.
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