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Punching a god


when I meet that god, Or whatever deity that stole, Who or whatever that stole it all, My mom, My dads love, All my close friends, Those I truly found hope in, I’M GONNA MAKE THEM PAY, Toko is just a kid, Not someone in debt, Not someone to shoulder it all, So why did they lose so much, Why did she have to suffer all alone, WHY DID SOME DEITY FIND JOY IN MY PAIN, Walking down this path no kid should walk, Shouldering burdens no child ever could, But she didn’t turn cold and bitter, She didn’t harden to stone and ice, She just smiled and walked on, Accepting the reality she was in, Not crying, Not arguing, But giving the world this bitter sweet smile I hate, The smile that feels so utterly sad. -Kitsuko Dragonstar
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Kitsuko Dragonstar

a young writer that wants to make the most out of this life time, and hopes to connect to readers and writer alike with my work. I’m your little Kitsuko thays here to write and serve lol. So please do enjoy my writing.

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PersonalThemeAbstract

Deeply personal trauma about loss, anchored in specific relationships and character Toko.

SparseMeasureDense

Multiple layered ideas: grief, rage, injustice, resilience compressed densely across 24 lines.

DarkSentimentBright

Overwhelmingly negative: loss, suffering, pain, betrayal, though tempered by resilience.

StillEnergyExplosive

Explosive caps, urgent questioning, confrontational tone toward deity, visceral emotional intensity.

MicroLengthEpic

24 lines falls within 16-30 range.

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Personification of deity, metaphors of hardening to stone/ice, bittersweet smile imagery present.

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure lyric internal voice; deeply personal reflection on pain without dramatic distance.

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letras
Awesome work

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