Retendered
Until they find a cure
for avarice and greed
the just will stand alone
Until they combine
the system as caste
vicissitude sits on the throne
Until they end
starvation and blight
world hunger forever abides
Until their love
is retendered anew
— Ascension forever denied
(First Book Of Prayers: January, 2026)
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Abstract philosophical meditation on systemic human failures and spiritual ascension.
Dense ideas: avarice, caste, starvation, love—multiple concepts compressed across lines.
Strongly negative: despair, isolation, hunger, denial pervade the entire piece.
Repetitive 'Until' creates building intensity despite meditative tone; moderate kinetic force.
Nine lines total; falls within 7-15 line range.
Personification (vicissitude on throne), metaphorical abstractions; some ornament but largely declarative.
Pure lyric internal voice; no narrative or dramatic persona shifts present.
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