Safe on the sea.
Safe on the sea
a few people braved the waves
the waves moved and tossed
the salty ocean air blew on their faces
it was fierce as the waves tossed
it took a lot of work to come out of it
then time made the ocean safe with travel.
Something wrong with this poem?
Replies are closed for this poem.
▾ This Poem's Voice
Your Poem's Voice
Personal experience with ocean, some universal struggle undertones
Multiple ideas: bravery, wave power, effort, time's passage compressed densely
Mixed: struggle and danger balanced against safety and resolution
Active verbs (tossed, blew, took) create movement; moderate intensity
Single prose-like block, approximately 30-35 words, under standard line count
One comparison (fierce as waves); mostly literal description and straightforward language
Lyric observational voice; no dramatic persona or clear narrative perspective
Comments (0)
No comments yet. Be the first to share your thoughts.
Log in to leave a comment.