Scourge

Sun, 10/14/2012 - 13:58 -- inkerss

Location

79705
United States
32° 4' 7.986" N, 102° 5' 40.8552" W

I found the affliction
deep in my bed;
no sleep for angels
and no devils dead.

Made an infliction
to block out the chill,
but no comfort in Heaven,
no green pastures or hills.

Found in Admission
a comfort so still
that idle hands itched
and stashed all the pills.

One day, I shattered
and took ‘em all straight;
doctors took care
not a second too late.

Again: the sharp fix,
my own tears I ate
and devils and demons
showed me my hate.

My own scars confessed me --
progress: flow’rs dead;
wrapped in isolation
forced rest ‘till it bled.

Met a man in freedom
community for sure;
saw the scars on his arms;
lone night next a blur.

Then tried to kill the voices
tripping in my head;
reached out for pain --
found hope instead.

Comments

marie

I really enjoy the rhyme scheme of this poem, and I think it helps your story flow well. The stanza "Again: the sharp fix,/my own tears I ate/and devils and demons/showed me my hate" stands out to me, and is particularly powerful because of the alliteration in the devils and demons line.

Keep it up! I'd love to see more of your work.

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