the snow was falling

July 27, 2012

The snow was falling when we went out to play Up and down the hill side. The snow was flaky when we shouted and fought Up and down the hill side. The snow was cold when we slid on our skateboards Up and down the hill side. The snow was white when we went out to play Up and down the hillside.

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jwienerAug 10, 2012

This poem reminded me of when I was young and would play in the snow for hours. I enjoyed how you made each stanza of the poem begin with "the snow" because it kept the focus on the weather in the story.

mimiJul 27, 2012

the poem is about weather (snow)

mimiJul 27, 2012

the poem is about weather