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THAT DAY !!! The Journey Untold; PART 1


That day Oh that day When I arrived and there was so much joy That Day Oh that day When I was so innocent of the world that I have come into That day when my mother was relieved from the pains of my arrival And father was filled with Joy and Relief. That Day Oh that day when I could sit That day when I could crawl. With Joy I moved towards anything I wanted but realized my movement is limited That day I thought I could move everywhere Tears Tears Tears What kind of feeling is this? It hurts and feels like the one on my arrival day. Mother feels uncomfortable , Father looks worried. There is no peace now. Pressures are rising Oh that day I learned that there is something called Pain; Oh Pain how can you not feel anyway than how you feel now? That Day Oh that day I realized that the pain was to keep me in good health and shape. Haa!!! That day Oh that day will soon be forgotten That Day Oh that day When body temperature rises Mother gets worried again and father can’t sleep What is the problem? That day when I was sent to back to my arrival place And the man in white overall said “everything will be fine” Oh that day I realized I was teething Haha Oh that day I remember I could feel mother’s warm body temperature The touch of fathers hands around me. Oh that Day I remember I learned there is something called Love Oh Love where have you been all this while You made pain take the lead, why couldn’t Pain feel like the way you feel? This question I asked myself as father and mother kept me close through the night at my arrival place Sirens Sirens Sirens What is this that I hear Why are all the people in white overall running to the same direction I could hear Tears again, I could hear shouts everywhere That day Oh that day I heard the word “be strong” Oh that day I said to myself there is so much to learn on this journey untold That day Oh that day I said to myself again “everyone has his or her own issue” at this arrival place The journey untold is likely to be tough I said to myself on that Day oh I remember That day Oh that day when I could hear birds sing in my window That day when all of a sudden I could stand on those two things from my waist Haha see the excitement, I could move a step at a time. Oh that day I realized I could walk. Two more steps and am back to the floor. Up again and again with one more step and back to the floor. That day Oh on that day I learned That on this journey untold; sometimes you fall But when you fall, you need to get up and move ahead Oh on that day I learned that this journey untold has a lot to teach that; You rise you fall and when you fall you rise again. Grounds have been gained, confidence level rising, movement is becoming faster Oh on that day I understood that this on this journey untold Sometimes movement could be faster. What is this feeling I feel within me. My throat yearns for somethings heavier. No not mothers milk this time. What nice aroma I smell. Ah it’s that thing that mother makes for father Ah My throat, my mouth is watering. Oh on that Day I learned something is called Food Mmm it tastes nice, I could taste it in and out of my mouth That Day Oh on that day I knew that this journey untold have to be continued later… To be continue…
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PersonalThemeAbstract

Primarily autobiographical/personal; milestones from infancy onward with minimal abstraction

SparseMeasureDense

Moderate density; cycles through childhood moments with recurring reflection and philosophical turns

DarkSentimentBright

Mixed but trending positive; pain and fear tempered by joy, love, discovery, and growth

StillEnergyExplosive

Moderate kinetic force; repetitive refrains create momentum, exclamations punctuate, but meditative passages slow pace

MicroLengthEpic

Substantial poem; appears to exceed 61 lines significantly across multiple stanzas

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Moderate ornamentation; metaphorical journey, personification of pain/love, but much declarative statement

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure lyric internal voice; introspective first-person reflection without narrative structure or persona shift

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