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The Five of Us


It was a glorious morning, voices of children— screaming, laughing, running free. Us, in our classroom, the five of us. We stood around our tables, talking together, laughing together— pure joy. We walked through the hallways, swinging our connected hands, all smiles. I gave her a ring— a goodbye, a hug, don’t forget me. Sad smiles. Us, in our classroom, the four of us. We stood around our tables, talking together, smiling together. Echoes of her. Half smiles. We walked through the hallways, holding hands. She gave me a glare— a goodbye, a sigh, don’t talk to me. Cold eyes. Us, in our classroom, the three of us. Talking together, gossip of her. Hollow eyes. We walked through the hallways. They held hands. Fake smiles. Them, in our classroom, the two of them. Talking together, laughing together— so bright. They walked through the hallways, swinging their connected hands, so sweet. They gave me a look— a wave, a smile, come along. Fake. Hollow eyes. Me, not in our classroom. One of me. Two of them. Three of them. Four of them. They stood around our tables, talking together, laughing together— forgetting me. I gave them a goodbye, a wave, a smile. Uh-huh. Averting eyes. I walked out the hallways, swinging hands— no smile. It was a glorious morning, voices of children— screaming, laughing, running free. Us, no longer in our classroom, the five of us— forgotten. ~M.Sora
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PersonalThemeAbstract

Deeply personal account of friendship dissolution and social exclusion.

SparseMeasureDense

Moderate idea density with repetitive structural progression tracking group dissolution.

DarkSentimentBright

Strongly negative; depicts betrayal, abandonment, loneliness, and emotional pain.

StillEnergyExplosive

Moderate intensity; restrained language with building emotional weight through repetition.

MicroLengthEpic

Approximately 85 lines; extended narrative arc tracking relationship deterioration.

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Metaphorical use of declining numbers; personification of smiles/eyes; some imagery.

LyricVoiceDramatic

Primarily lyric-internal with narrative structure showing speaker's shifting position.

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Comments (3)

rose345
very real poem
navyaish23
nice
Nathan3259
Felt the emotion, very poignant

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