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This Phobia and I; She and Me

by Valarie Golden

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Water remembers the pleas for silence Ducking your head under in the bathtub, Just to listen to your own heart beat and the quiet "Glug-Glug" Of a faucet. That sound should not bring me the peace that it does. I like to think that when I hike And drink from a spring, That maybe the droplets that keep from my hands, Could bring relief to someone at the trail head. Think about it. That one drop could be a sign to the trail head. A quiet "You got this" From someone at the top. It is ironic. I love water, But any water deeper then 5 feet terrifies me. A phobia is what I have. Water and I... We have a bittersweet volley. She loves me and I love her. I bounce my knee at the mention, And she remembers my fear. She uses it to push me to my limit, To the greatest version of myself. But I wonder... Does she remember her strengths. The power to drown, And the power to terrify?
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Valarie Golden

Hello, darlings. I am Val. She/her. I am an ally of the earth and all her people. I also happen to be a follower of jesus. I am a poet and an author and a girl that dreams. I am a minor between the ages of 14 and 18. I am no longer active on Hello Poetry, but you can find me there under the same pen name I use here. "If more of us valued food and cheer and song above hoarded gold, it would be a merrier world." -J.R.R Tolkien

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PersonalThemeAbstract

Primarily personal/autobiographical relationship with water; some philosophical reflection.

SparseMeasureDense

Multiple interconnected ideas: silence, relief, phobia, toxic love. Moderate density.

DarkSentimentBright

Mixed: peace and love balanced against fear, terror, irony. Ambivalent overall.

StillEnergyExplosive

Predominantly introspective and quiet with brief intensities; nervous energy (knee bouncing).

MicroLengthEpic

47 lines; falls in 31-60 line range.

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Personification of water as 'she,' metaphorical toxic relationship, symbolic droplets.

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure lyric internal monologue; direct first-person voice throughout.

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Nice poem!

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