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Why stay? when the day is dark?
Why cry? If all you do is lie,
Deep in that blue sky, all I see is us in July.
Yet, this was when you and that woman caught eyes,
You became her shoulder to cry on,
While I was left feeling torn.
You've caused a deep hole, that can't be told.
I decided to run away in the cold,
That day that you rejected my invoked to celebrate our day.
Then the month May caused me to pray, that one day
I wouldn't beg you to say.
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Deeply personal betrayal narrative; autobiographical heartbreak, not abstract.
Moderate idea density; multiple emotional beats layered across extended lines.
Strongly negative; anguish, rejection, abandonment, despair throughout.
Restless questioning and emotional turbulence; moderate kinetic intensity.
Approximately 12 lines; falls in 7-15 range.
Some metaphor (shoulder, hole, cold); mostly declarative emotional speech.
Pure lyric internal voice; direct first-person confession and pain.
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