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warped and twisted

by bram2012

April 11, 2013

Harsh words and violent blows hidden secrets nobody knows, eyes are open hands are fisted deep inside im warped and twisted so many tricks and so many lies to many whens and to many whys nobodies special nobodies gifted im just me warped and twisted, sleeping awake and choking on a dream listening loudly to a silent scream call my mind the numbers unlisted lost in some one so warped and twisted on my knees alive but dead look at the invisible blood ive bled im not gone my mind had drifted don't expect much im warped and twisted, burnt out wasted empty and hollow today's just yesterdays tomorrow the sun died out the ashes sifted im still here warped and twisted here)

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Primarily personal/autobiographical self-examination with some philosophical abstraction about identity.

Extremely dense; multiple ideas per line. Rapid accumulation of observations, contradictions, suffering.

Strongly negative throughout: violence, lies, warping, death, hollowness, burnt-out despair.

High kinetic intensity; rapid-fire declarative statements, aggressive tone, urgent rhythm despite internal subject.

Approximately 25-30 lines; falls in the 16-30 line range.

Oxymoron-heavy (sleeping awake, alive but dead, silent scream); metaphor (invisible blood, sun died); strong ornamentation.

Pure lyric internal voice; first-person introspection throughout; no narrative or dramatic distance.

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Comments (3)

Jerp1006Mar 5, 2022

YOU HAVE TO BE KIDDING ME!!! I literally just made this account so I could reply to you. I was looking up what year This poem was written to share with a friend and I saw your comment. I don't know exactly when I found it if it was 05 or 06 but I graduated in 07 and it helped me Through quite a bit of high school so I've been with this poem I guess since it's beginning pretty much. I have been published in 7 or 9 or 9 poetry books and 2 countries from English class Just showing us a flyer one time that you could submit to be part of a compilation it's honestly no big deal but I add that just to show I have a little bit of poetry appreciation more than your average bear. And I ABSOLUTELY LOVE this poem. It is my VERY FAVORITE to this day for many many reasons. "Sleeping awake & choking on a dream listening loudly to a silent scream" That 1 got me most of all lyrically lyrically. I was so blown away and am so in love with the way that you're son I guess according to your post not only understood these complex things that most people just brush off as a troubled person or whatever but found the beauty in it The most beautiful and exquisite words to express such Misunderstood and lonely But beautiful if you just look a little deeper way of existance. I'm sorry I won't keep rambling I've taken up enough of your time but I'd feel like but I thought you and your son May like to know what this poem is to me please let him him know if you want to and think it's a good idea that I thank him for this work of his and that To this day it is the absolute very best description of ..... me basically Who I am and what I deal with on a daily basis inside etc that I have ever found

Skittles86Aug 25, 2020

I would appreciate if you deleted my poem. This poem means a lot to me. I have proof that I wrote this. -Skittles

TuanalynnApr 12, 2020

<p>I know the person who wrote this poem. My son wrote this poem in 2005, so I really don't appreciate someone else trying to claim his poem. Do you have any idea what this poem is even about, because I do!!!</p>