What About Black Love

My black skin, 

On your 

black skin.

What looks better

Than ours’

Side by side?

What a

Beautiful Sight.

It just seems 

So right.

You over

There 

Looking Midnight. 

Was that 

Not polite?

I would

Appreciate 

You

Just how

You like.

Just saying,

Us together 

Would be 

A delight.

Especially, in the 

Sun’s light.

Others might

Think 

In demise.

Since

We looking 

So tight.

They 

Just mad,

Because 

You living

Life

Like

Knight.

 

This poem is about: 
My community

Comments

eaglesore1

nice but give a little bit more detail from an outsiders perspective it could be a little bit confusing re read and as you re read it to yourself you will understand wha ti was saying liek in hte middle and towards the end.

 

Chel_olu

I get why you say my writing can be confusing to some, but that may just be because they can’t relate. Thanks for the feedback, I know I can always add a bit more detail. But what details would you consider for this poem?

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