Why I Write : The Unspoken Words

June 17, 2013

Unspoken words are very powerful words Words that go without say But hold strong meanings in the array of thoughts These are my Unspoken Words To you I may look like I got it all But dont be confuse with my countenance The face that you see is broken and hurt Hurt by the trials and tribulations I had to face I didnt know where or who to go to So I never let anyone know I was hurting I left them alone Alone to dwindle and wither away These are my unspoken words I needed somewhere to go Somewhere to get these voices and emotions out my mind But where These Unspoken words were causing self deterioration I had to stop before it was too late But what could I do I saw myself crumbling right before everyone eyes Then it hit me My book of dreams and faith is all I need So I gather my thoughts and began to write Writing to my own rules Expressing myself in ways that only I could understand Revealing things I kept hidden for oh soo long These are my unspoken words A dream never gives up on a person Its the person that gives up on the dream If I let my dreams die they will wither away They will be no more than unspoken words My dream is what keeps me alive Holding on for dear life Poetry allowed me to figure out my dreams So many writers inspired me along the way Poetry inspired me to never give up Poetry is the backbone to my dreams That's why I will neber give up A dream never gives up on the person Its the person that gives up on the dream My words that were once unspoken is my dream

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NikkiMOct 7, 2013

First, thank you for a gift of what feels like a very honest poem. My favorite lines in this poem are:A dream never gives up on a person Its the person that gives up on the dream (this is a fabulous turn of phrase and personifies the concept of "dream" -- that's great.)--and-- Poetry is the backbone to my dreams (This is a wonderful metaphor, very concrete and evocative. It would be great if you could do more of this in your poetry, perhaps even in a revision of this poem.)This poem has elements of a form called "ars poetica," a poem about poetry. I like that aspect of this poem because it reflects not only the speaker's feelings, but puts the speaker (the "I" in the poem) at a distance from the poem, almost rising above the poem or peeling back the curtain to show the reader the poet with a pen in his/her hand. It's a cool technique. In poetry, as in life, spelling counts, so go through this poem and see where you've got some spelling and grammatical errors. Of course, spelling and grammar can be loose in a poem, but that has to be intentional, and it didn't feel intentional here. Also, you want to watch for phrases in a poem that you've heard a lot before -- these are called cliches, and they can weaken a poem's intent. The more original your language, the better. Good work with this one and keep on writing! Nikki

JalishauJun 17, 2013

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