Wishing
Wishing.
Always wishing
A wishbone
A fallen eyelash
A shooting star
11:11
Birthday candles
It never ends
Forever wishing for more
Never satisfied with what we have
Trapped in a prison of insecurity
It consumes our being
Floods our souls
As we drown in our own selfish comparison
We still wish for more.
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Moves from personal wish-making rituals to universal abstract commentary on desire and insecurity.
Dense packing of ideas: wishes, satisfaction, prison metaphor, comparison, drowning across compact lines.
Strongly negative: insecurity, imprisonment, drowning, selfish, never satisfied, consuming despair.
Intense kinetic language with 'floods,' 'drown,' 'consumes' creating urgency and emotional turbulence.
Approximately 14 lines of varying length; falls in 7-15 line range.
Rich metaphors (prison, drowning, floods), personification (consumes, floods), vivid wish imagery throughout.
Pure lyric internal voice; introspective meditation on personal/universal desire without narrative or dramatic persona.
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