Anthill

Tue, 07/23/2013 - 05:17 -- Hot Rod

America Is simply one big anthill.
we build foundation for country to start on.
We get a bigger population.
We start exploring new territories.
We go to other places and kill other people.
We take over smaller civilizations.
We steal other's resources.
We take over lands.
All for our queen.

Comments

Hot Rod

TY for taking the time to read a few of my poems. I know i sound like a dick on commenting but I'm trying to get views while giving harsh advice. You will never get any good at anything wiithout being told whats truly wrong with your methods.

eve

This might just be my patriotic pride coming through, but i think its more of a people problem then one country. If most countries had the ablitiy to take pretty much whatever they want they would go down the same route. Then again, as much as i hate to say it, I might not be seeing this with an openmind. I'm not bashing you poem i think its very good, im a fan of your works, i was just giving my thoughts on the matter.

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