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Dark Clouds

by rose345

Clouds are dark The sky is light Blocked off by the dark I'm swimming in it Keep my head up Out of the clouds But my vision is clouded Blink away tears Running down my face Rivers of sorrow and wasted hope Why did I think I could beat the clouds When weather is an undeniable force No one hears my screams The clouds muffle it well enough Little water droplets keep me hidden Keep my life contained The thunder comes Shakes me awake No more drowning Back to treading water How do I get out of the clouds When they hide my way out? I can't see light through them So I don't know which way is up Where is the sun? Where am I?
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I am a student in a rural Midwest town. I hope someday to be a lawyer or a psychologist. Remember to always live life to the fullest because you never know where life will take you. Be the light! Leave a comment if my poem meant something to you☀

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Your Poem's Voice

PersonalThemeAbstract

Personal struggle with depression/mental fog, uses concrete cloud imagery.

SparseMeasureDense

Multiple metaphorical layers unfolded steadily; moderate idea density across 25 lines.

DarkSentimentBright

Despair, drowning, sorrow, and disorientation dominate throughout poem.

StillEnergyExplosive

Builds from static observation to emotional turbulence; thunder provides kinetic moment.

MicroLengthEpic

25 lines falls within 16-30 range.

PlainFigurativeOrnamented

Extended cloud/weather metaphor, water/drowning imagery, personification of clouds.

LyricVoiceDramatic

Pure introspective lyric voice; direct first-person emotional expression throughout.

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Comments (4)

ImAPoet?
Thank you, and stick with it!
rose345
Thank you so much! That means a lot.
rose345
Wow, thanks, that honestly means so much more than you probably realize. It started as a hobby and now has become so vital to me, it is unbelievable.
ImAPoet?
You are such a good poet, I love all all your poems so much!

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