Sneaky Pete
What’s happened to the poem as poem, Sneaky Pete?
What’s happened to the poem as poem?
It’s crossing the Pacific
In an underwater sky lab,
In a cute little butane box
ln a gizmo way down there.
And the shitty air smells pretty
To us old-time gringos,
But our loop-the-loop-the-loop biplane
Isn’t used to the tundra.
So push a little harder
Till the gizmo acts frisky
With multi-colored fissures
That widen as you walk.
Rush-hour joggers brush against me
Whispering of nightmarish accessories.
What’s happened to the poem as poem, Sneaky Pete?
What’s happened to the poem as poem?
It’s dangling from a black hole
In a Golden Oldie time warp,
In a fun little gunnysack
In a doodad way up here.
Yin. The cute die in summer.
Yang. Dark out and the curtain’s stuck.
There’s a Papa Doc sunset
On my “That’s All, Folks!” burnoose.
No touchee! Its naked loins
Turn young lungs puce.
Jes’ keep your lips on the siphon, hon.
I’m movin’ back to town.
Back where the poem as poem’s gone,
Back where the poem’s gone.
Back where the poem as poem’s gone.
Back where the poem’s gone.
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PersonalThemeAbstract
Mix of abstract meta-commentary on poetry with personal voice and concrete imagery.
SparseMeasureDense
Dense surreal images, multiple ideas per stanza, rapid shifts in location/tone.
DarkSentimentBright
Cynical, despairing tone about poetry's fate; darkly comic but fundamentally pessimistic.
StillEnergyExplosive
Frenetic imagery, exclamatory commands, colloquial urgency; moderately explosive language.
MicroLengthEpic
Approximately 45 lines; falls in 31-60 range.
PlainFigurativeOrnamented
Heavily ornamented: metaphors (black holes, sky labs), personification, surreal imagery throughout.
LyricVoiceDramatic
Primarily lyric voice with direct address to 'Sneaky Pete'; some narrative/dramatic elements.
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